Tuesday, March 9, 2010

~~~...Milti hai...~~~

gham mein dard nahi milta ab
meethi si ik rukawat milti hai..
teri yaadon mein khokar mere
labon ko muskurahat milti hai..

ek arse se tadap thi rooh mein,
ab halki si sarsarahat milti hai..
dillagi thi, ab dilruba hai 'Viti',
katron mein shararat milti hai..

aahon se naseeb khulte kaash,
tooti si bas nazaakat milti hai..
aas panaah-e-'Noor' ki, lekin
kismat ki baghaawat milti hai..
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16 comments:

  1. Vishal KeswaniMarch 9, 2010 at 1:52 AM

    Touching !! nice :)

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  2. HarishMarch 9, 2010 at 2:16 AM

    badiyaa hai ji...

    my fav line :

    aas panaah-e-'Noor' ki, lekin
    kismat ki baghaawat milti hai

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  3. *KHUSHI*March 9, 2010 at 2:25 AM

    aahon se naseeb khulte kaash,
    tooti si bas nazaakat milti hai..

    Wel written...

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  4. neerja tiwariMarch 9, 2010 at 3:09 AM

    teri yaadon mein khokar mere
    labon ko muskurahat milti hai..

    padh kar tumhari nazm..
    likhne ki meri chahat badhti hai
    kho gaye tthe kuch shabd
    dhoondne ki chahat badhti hai

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  5. MysteriousSylphMarch 9, 2010 at 3:17 AM

    Loved it... ur posts always touch the strings of my heart...
    Loved these:
    "teri yaadon mein khokar mere
    labon ko muskurahat milti hai.."

    "aas panaah-e-'Noor' ki, lekin
    kismat ki baghaawat milti hai.."

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  6. Bhumish GajjarMarch 9, 2010 at 6:11 AM

    'Viti' ka blog padhne se, dil ko sukun ki aas milti hai..
    Ek bar padh liya toh, roz roz blog padhne ki pyas milti hai..

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  7. Prolific DyslexicMarch 9, 2010 at 6:12 AM

    Ermmm... it sounds very poetic and nice.
    But my Hindi/Urdu isn't so good that I can comment on your post. So if you could translate it...

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  8. delhidreamsMarch 9, 2010 at 6:26 AM

    i liked the first four lines the most. but u need to look at the flow of ur words carefully. there were a lot of words that cud have been removed to make the flow better and the poem roll out better on the tongue. hope u won't mind :)

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  9. RichaMarch 9, 2010 at 6:41 AM

    yaar u r talent :) ths wat i can say :)

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  10. Cute nemesisMarch 9, 2010 at 8:05 AM

    Awesome Post gal..A nice poem, its running in ma mind now. Keep up the writting style

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  11. UmeshMarch 9, 2010 at 8:31 AM

    very well written , hope to see few more ofthese in the days to come , cheers

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  12. ani_asetMarch 11, 2010 at 4:39 AM

    shabash :) nicely done once again viti

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  13. baavrivitiMarch 12, 2010 at 8:11 PM

    thanks a lot everyone! :)

    @neerja ji- i love all your work..you are a big inspiration!

    @bhumish- badiya likha hai yaar! :D

    @prolific dyslexic- will translate them sometime for sure :)

    @adee- thanks a lot adee! and i agree with you..this could have been much better..will work on it :)

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  14. mMSMarch 12, 2010 at 11:54 PM

    #ilikethis

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  15. NwazMarch 13, 2010 at 9:12 PM

    we all go through these feelings but
    only a few can pen them down ..... to this depth ...

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  16. baavrivitiMarch 16, 2010 at 12:48 PM

    thanks a lot both of you! :)

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