Monday, March 15, 2010

~~~...I will smile with you...~~~

I'll forget you and move on.
Who am I kidding, really?


There are some people, love.
They just don't leave. Ever.


Broken though, I did leave.
I turned and walked a while.


All ties seemed cut and torn.
Then you called, and I came.


It did happen. Twice, it did.
You will never let me fade.


Knowing that you love me,
I will smile with you, 'Noor.'


Walking towards the sunset,
I'll have your hand, one day.
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14 comments:

  1. Bhumish GajjarMarch 15, 2010 at 7:24 PM

    Wow!! Keep going, gurl! :)
    Btw, ye 'Noor' kaun hain?

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  2. UnknownMarch 15, 2010 at 8:30 PM

    awesome work viti!!!!why dont u compose a book???

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  3. shweta Sylvia janiMarch 15, 2010 at 9:06 PM

    Great poem,little poetess.

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  4. PrasannaMarch 15, 2010 at 9:26 PM

    The last line is the best one! walking towards the sunset, simply superb!

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  5. StephenMarch 15, 2010 at 9:27 PM

    awww lovely :D who's noor? :P

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  6. NarsimhaMarch 15, 2010 at 10:01 PM

    Its so beautiful.. loved it.. :)
    But a small advise, cut your looses and move forward.

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  7. ani_asetMarch 15, 2010 at 10:12 PM

    nice and all mushy viti :)

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  8. Aditya NandodeMarch 16, 2010 at 9:57 AM

    Hey! I found it bit amusing! Like it has a second meaning, lighter one, all ties cut: And like i see ties(Kanth Langot)!
    Well was just kidding! Nice one though!

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  9. RashiMarch 16, 2010 at 10:42 AM

    i really like the way you've used contradictions in few lines and esp the end which is so melancholic yet optimistic

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  10. baavrivitiMarch 16, 2010 at 12:58 PM

    thank you so much everyone for the amazing response! :)

    @bhumish, @stephen - 'noor' is the love of 'viti' ... both are literary characters that have been developing through the various poems on this blog :)

    @GRE: :D i think we talked about it ;)

    @narsimha: good advice :D

    @aditya: ahaha i love that interpretation seriously! thanks!

    @rashi:i am glad you like it :)

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  11. AnonymousMarch 17, 2010 at 10:06 AM

    The lady with a peculiar name.......
    Didn't surprise me, when I saw the poetry, least was I surprised. Still I am bowled over by the poetry, which I can't hide.
    Keep scribbling for us lesser souls.

    Last but not the least, I envy the chemistry between 'noor' and 'viti'. Hats off to you

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  12. Vishal KeswaniMarch 18, 2010 at 7:26 AM

    Cool :) very nice yaar

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  13. Defiant PrincessApril 2, 2010 at 10:50 AM

    "Knowing that you love me,
    I will smile with you, 'Noor.'"
    Love this..
    great work !
    Keep writing such amazing piece of art :)

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  14. baavrivitiApril 5, 2010 at 9:25 PM

    @ameenmaj-thanks a lot! keep coming back to read more :)

    @vishal-thanks :)

    @princess-keep coming back to read! thank you :)

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