hai majhdhaar mein nayya, yeh meri-teri zindagi
kabhi sulagti hui lapten, yeh meri-teri zindagi
yunhi geet banke kanon mein thirakti rahi hai
ithlaati, balkhaati, kaisi yeh meri-teri zindagi
teri aankhon ke aaine mein dikh jaati hai, yun
khilke gulaab sareekhi, yeh meri-teri zindagi
'viti' ke ashk hon ya ho 'Noor' ki muskurahat,
kuch alag hi hai baat iski, yeh meri-teri zindagi...
wah! very nice lines!
ReplyDeletejust superb !! awsome.. its gonna b looped in my head now " ye meri teri zindagi"
ReplyDeleteawesome, i like the line "ye meri teri zindagi" :)
ReplyDeletewah wah! wah wah!
ReplyDeletetouching..
ReplyDeletei always wonder why Viti gets the Ashk and noor gets muskurahat ...
O Wow!!! Good work Viti..
ReplyDeleteGood work, but some how I feel it could have been better..but as the poet it's your feel :)
ReplyDeleteoye!! mast hain meri teri zindagi! :) zindagi rocks!!
ReplyDeletethank you everyone for the kind words :)
ReplyDelete@vishal: kismat ka khel hai, kisi ke hoothon par muskurahat, aur kisi ki aankhon mein ashk :)
@meeta: thanks dear! keep critiquing :)
@bhumish: agreed!